Suicide: A Poem
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Suicide: A Poem
A glance upon yon window pane
A story is told by the streaking rain
It is one of sorrow and of pain
And a tear from my eye I can’t restrain
The flow of my thoughts I can’t refrain
From the playing of this deadly game
I sit alone sinking into my chair
To face this world without you, I cannot bare
Together you and I made a perfect pair
But alone in this world I wonder how I would fare
Happiness to reach again I wouldn’t dare
Because life my friends just isn’t fair
Upon the table the tools do sit
For lately I feel a need to quit
A knife sharp enough to make the slit
This way I’m afraid is a slow exit
The cut this makes is hard to knit
Too messy and it wouldn’t fit.
You my one true love was the fairest maiden
From my arms so violently taken
And to the core my soul was shaken
Slammed by steel and filled with lead my heart is laden
Once a humbled servant now I stand forsaken
Unlike Poe I have no Raven.
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Take my life, to heaven I won’t go
But this could end my broken hearted woe
What comes next I’ll never know
As the thunder in the sky my feelings show
The sky blackened, pierced by lightening makes it glow
Soon I shall be knocking on heaven’s door.
If I’m to lay my life to waste
The act must come with haste
And I must act without chaste
A life without you cannot be faced
My pulse quickens, my heart raced
Interwoven are our souls like fingers interlaced
The phone rings with a deafening sound
I spring from my chair, across the room I’m bound
My eyes are swollen and round
I pick up the phone from a newspaper mound
The voice on the other end I found
And the phone drops to the ground
“Don’t do it” comes the plea
“For an eternity without you I cannot see.”
Out of the house I quickly flee
In the grass of the yard I fall to my knee
Twas the voice of my love in the phone with need
Back in the house I put away the tools of death with glee.
She’s saved my life once, she’s saved it twice
She shall not have to save it thrice
I’ll continue on with this mournful life
Plainly this will have to suffice
Like a mask happiness will be my disguise
Old in my bed, I’ll be buried with these lies.
Author's Note
In no way, shape, or form is this poem reflective of any current situations. If you were worried I appreciate that but there is no need for worry. I watched the movie "What Dreams May Come" and was inspired to write this. If you have not watched this movie, watch it. It is a great movie and will move you in one way or another.
Copyright 2009 by Wesley Cox
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Thank you so much PL. I appreciate your comment and am glad that you liked it. PS, I continue to try different poems because of your encouragement. Thank you.
yep i am pleased with your results. I have been writing poems on and off for 30 years, and i am learning all the time....... never learned as much as i have since i have been on hub pages. I am so happy to see your journey, you are such a lovely person, and happiness will come your way. You are like me you need to believe in yourself more. How could anyone cast you aside, i don't believe it, a treasure like you needs to be held on to. I get so much joy to see your work and especially now that you have said my encouragement helps.... god bless x
Thank you PL.
You scared me anyway. LOL Great poem Wes. thanks
Ditto, the title attracted me to read it and thank God it's a movie inspired one :) It's very deep and painful...
Ralwus: Thank you very much for visiting and enjoying the poem.
Shamelabboush: Thank you as well. I am glad that the title attracted you to read. Also that movie is deep about soulmates and suicide, and what one man would do for his soulmate.
have you ever watched "dead poet@s society"
I saw that one a long time ago and hardly remember any of it though.
Too close to home...this gave me goosebumps. I'm glad it wasn't a tragic ending. Well done Wes.
Thank you for your kind comments and am glad that you liked it.
This is an excellent poem. It touched me very deeply. I'm having some trouble putting into words just exactly how it made me feel, but I can really feel the dispair and the pain in the words. I know you call it Suicide, but it's a love poem. I've seen "What Dreams May Come" several times. This is very powerful stuff.
A VERY intense poem, and beautifully crafted, indeed. I happened to read this straight when it came out and I was overwelmed thinking it were real... Right on to you. :)
I have missed reading many of you!!
That is one movie I have watched that really left a mark on me. This was beautiful, sad, dark and also enchanting. It seemed also reminiscent of Edward Allen Poe style...Which I love! As I said, this movie is very moving and I agree that everyone should at least see it once. Once again, this was awesome and I loved it!! Thank you for sharing your talent!
A very moving poem so glad it was inspired by a movie
Disturbia: I agree that it is in essence a poem of love beyond the grave but for most of the poem it is of suicidal thoughts this person has because of the loss of his wife. I thank you very much for reading and commenting on this poem and finding its message powerful.
Invictus: It honors me that you were overwhelmed by this poem when you first read it and I assume you came back to read it again or comment so I thank you. Also welcome back from your short sabbatical from hubpages. Its good to have you back.
JJ: I have read the Raven by Poe so to be compared on a reminiscent note to him and his poetry is a great honor. Plus it is also very nice indeed to be getting such strong comments by the great poets here at hubpages. I am still working on another poem that will probably be done in the same style as this one. Inspiration strikes us at weird times though and to finish the other poem could be awhile.
Maggs: Thank you for visiting my poem and liking it.
beautiful poem....that moves you deeply. I love the way you can so effortlessly pour your sadness (and joy) into your words. it's a real gift. thank you for sharing!
great poem I loved it!
i know you said it wasnt ur thoughts but it is in a many peoples thoughts all the time!
MyownWorld: Thank you so much for the appreciation. I am glad that the words upon this page has moved you. Thanks for reading.
Janet: I am glad that you liked this poem and yes I know suicidal thoughts are present in someone at any moment of any day. I hope this poem also conveys the message that suicide is not worth the act. That there is life after pain and suffering. I hope the people who do read this and are contemplating suicide receive that message and don't go through with it. Every life is worth saving and every life is beautiful in its own way. Again thanks for reading.
You know I rarely do like poems that rhythm; simply because most of the time the words seemed forced and the intention or meaning of the poem is subdued. However, in your case, the words went right along with your overall message =]. It's actually quite impressive that you were able to manage the flow precisely and elegantly throughout the entire work. I'm glad I had to chance to read this — Thank you for sharing your insight.
Eerie! Perfect for this time of year. Glad it was fiction. My Mom went out that way. Its hard on the ones left behind. I did like that movie. :)
Arthur: Thank you for coming by and reading my poem. I never actually thought of the rhythm that way as it does come across forced sometimes. Again thanks for the insightful comment.
Ms behavior: I'm glad you liked the poem but sorry that it has a personal touch for you.
I truly love this poem, very creative you are Wesley! Thanks for the wonderful read.
Thank you ladybird I am glad that you liked it.
Loved following the thinking process of someone in that state of mind. The Poe reference totally makes it for me!
Great job, Wesley and thanks especially for the note at the bottom. Whew! What a relief you're planning to stay around and write some more:-)! MM
MM, I am glad that you enjoyed this poem enough to leave me such a nice comment. I had a hard time writing this because I had to put myself into the mood. Thank you for stopping in to read this.
Wow! This brought tears to my eyes (I'll have to watch that movie now). I am rarely speechless, but...wow! I to read more of your work to be sure, but perhaps you are the Poe reincarnate? Your choice of words and the flow of the lines puts him in mind (not just the fact you mentioned him in the poem). Absolutely phenomenal. I am an instant fan and can't wait to read more.
Ha! How's that for speechless, huh?
I see you are in Iraq at present and I just want to say thank you for your service and loyalty. From the bottom of my heart, thank you.
Azur Moon Wolf: Thank you so much for the wonderful comment. I am glad that you enjoyed this poem and hopefully the underlying message of it. Again thank you for stopping by and reading.
Wesley I too am glad you made the comment at the end also. I am still worried about you. You need to keep in touch. Missed you in august. Do all these people on this sight know you or are they just fellow poets? I am glad to see you have found a talent to channel your emotions, you are very good. But what do I know about poetry, please email when you can.
Thanks for reading Uncle Wayne, I am glad that you like the poem. The people on this site kinda know me through my writing, and they are some of the best poets I've read. I'll e-mail soon.
So glad you had the comment at the end! I lost a husband to suicide and you had me worried there for a minute.
BevsPaper: Thank you for leaving a comment and I am sorry of your loss. I hope you enjoyed the poem though.
I can' believe how clever and smart you are. You sure make your momma proud. I did not enjoy the subject of the poem, when I first began reading it,but I see there is a message there for those who want to listen. You are exceptional and I am not biased because you are my son.
Mom: I am glad that you made it to my page, and you will also note that I never did publish that one story. It didn't sit right. I love you and the message is life is worth living.
this was amazing imagiry, i loved it, for you to write this deep and full of emotion like you really actually were suffering. good work
Brother you are amazing! I have been reading your stuff this evening and I feel blessed to have such a talented brother. I never knew how deep you were and I apologize for that I guess we haven't been that close for a long time and thats probably my fault but I hope you do know how much I love you and appreciate what you are fighting for right now. Please keep in touch because I miss you and I miss our boxing matches and big refrigerator boxes
Tmboykin: Thank you very much for your kind comments.
Sis I am glad that you enjoyed reading this poem but I am not too sure about the talent thing, but if you say so I'll agree. Thank you for commenting. And I most certainly remember the time machine games we used to play.
your write is beautifully dark and filled with so much emotions beautiful so beautiful
Thank you cherry rose, I'm glad you liked it.
This made my heart pound. I'm ashamed to say I have been there, and hasten to add I am very, very over it. You have written this so beautifully, it is moving without being morbid. Painful but very spiritual. I think I will return to this often, it's bookmarked! Well done.
Your kind words humble me and I am so happy that you learned life deserves to have you in it. Thank you again for your kind comments.
You write beautifully,.. I was engrossed with every word from start to finish,..this should be in a hub news letter spotlight, for sure.
Thank you RS for your comment, I appreciate the praise and am honored you feel as such. Thank you for reading.
well done my friend...well done.
Thank you for commenting and reading.
Wow, Wesley. What a powerful poem. I was scared too. lol
Thank you Granny's House. This poem does elicit some emotions in reading it doesn't it. Thanks for reading.
The title attracted me to read your poem too Wesley, it was really amazing. I've attempted suicide before, so it was interesting to see that you had written it with no true story behind it, just a movie. Very clever. :)
Thank you for reading and am glad that you enjoyed it. Remember the message that all life is beautiful and worth pushing through the pain. Take care and thanks again.
My friend you ARE a poet! My thanks to the person who inspired you. I look forward to more of your work.
Thank you for reading my work and enjoying the message within it. There is plenty to read.
nice poem, it helps alot. thank you
Great poem on a sensitive topic.
thank you for reading.
poetlorraine 2 years ago
glad you put that comment at the end., lost a sister to suicide, and don't want to be losing any friends.....
Your work is just amazing........ to think you thought you could not write poetry a few weeks ago....... keep at it please....